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The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The plans illustrate the existing and future-planned layout of a
university’s
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university
 sports
centre
. At present, the university's sport
centre
 comprises of three parts, namely an indoor unit and
two
 outdoor courts. There will be a
dramatical
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dramatic
dramatically
grammatical
changes
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change
 to the overall layout. The most noticeable change is that the
two
 outdoor courts will be integrated into the indoor unit which provides more room to
built
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build
 new facilities. The west outdoor court will be demolished to a leisure pool while the
east
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eastern
 one is going to be replaced by
two
 dance studios and a sports hall. A 25m swimming pool surrounded by a gym, changing
room
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rooms
, seating area and reception is
at
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in
 the middle of the indoor building. The core of the indoor sports
centre
 almost remain the same,
although
 the gym located
at
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on
the northern
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the north
 side will be extended towards the eastern side. Plus, because of the redevelopment,
two
 new changing rooms will be built at the southeast and southwest corner and the broaden reception hall will provide additional room for a sports shop and cafe. Overall, the university's sport
centre
 will undergo many changes and be more functional with a lot of new facilities added.
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