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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the three pie charts provided reveals the average proportion in typical meals of three types of nutrients
such
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 as
sodium
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, saturated fat and added sugars. The percentages of these three nutrients in breakfast, lunch,
dinner
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 and
snacks
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 that American citizens generally consume are given and they are detrimental
for
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to
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 health if consumed
plenty
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in plenty
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 in quantity.
Overall
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, it can be concluded that
sodium
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 and saturated fat are mostly eaten at
dinner
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whereas
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 it is
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a snack
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snack
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snacks
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 when the highest percentage of added
sugar
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consumed
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is consumed
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. Looking at the charts in more detail,
dinner
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 consists of the largest figure for
sodium
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 saturated fat
to
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apply
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42% and 37% respectively.
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, the lunch they eat comprises
of
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29%
sodium
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, 26% saturated fats and nearly 20%
sugar
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. The amount of
sugar
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 in an average meal for
dinner
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 and lunch was much lower at 23% and 19%, respectively. Turning to breakfast and
snacks
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, which
also
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 had comparable percentages, they were both made up of 14%
sodium
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. For saturated fats,
snacks
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 contained 21% and breakfast was slightly lower at 16%. In terms of
sugar
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, there was the greatest disparity with 42% of
snacks
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 being sugary and just 18% of breakfasts being made up of
sugar
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner, snacks, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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