some people feel that entertainers (e. g film stars, pop musicians, sports stars) are paid too much money. do you agree or disagree? which other types of job should be highly paid?

It is often said that public persons earn a
lot
of
money
and at the same time there are many jobs who are not so well paid despite that are very important for our society.From my point of view I think we have to maintain a balance and do not forget to invest in others activities who are important too. Nowadays, we live in a century who looks up for the models.Children are very influenced by influencing people.
For example
, on the internet, there are many iconic persons who promote trips, clothes, games and so on.Adolescents want to become like
this persons
Suggestion
this person
.In order to be known on the market, many companies' appeals to the
influence
Suggestion
influential
people for advertising and pay a
lot
of
money
for
this
.I think that in a way they deserve that
money
because it is a hard work to maintain you on the top
.
Accept space
.
Another example is footballers who gain a
lot
of
money
, but they deserve
this
because it is a sport who needs more physical effort,
this
plural of "this"
these
people are always away from their family.Pop music, film stars is in the same position, they have a
lot
of
money
, but
they
of them or themselves
their
particulary
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
life has to suffer.
On the other hand
, we do not have to forget that, are many sports who deserve attention and
money
, like handball, volleyball, gymnastics and so on.
In addition
to
this
, many sportsmen who represent us at a high level at the Olympics Games, they do not gain a
lot
of
money
and sometimes they are forced to do their exercises in
unpropiate
not suitable for a particular occasion etc
inappropriate
appropriate
halls without adequate equipment.The government should spend
money
too in the medical area, in many countries, there are doctors who gain less
money
that a public person,
although
they save peoples lives and learn a
lot
during the university years. Taking everything into consideration, entertainers have their own place in our life, we need them in some way and, but at the same time we do not have to forget that other activities should be equally paid for their jobs.
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