the chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day,and also the average price (in US DOllars) of their tickets.

the chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day,and also the average price (in US DOllars) of their tickets.
This
table provides information about the number of
passengers
arriving at the train station per hour per day and the average ticket
pay
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at a certain time. From the table, we can see that there were three times that reached a high number of
passengers
at 12 noon as many as 700
passengers
,
second
at 8 am as many as 690
passengers
, and at 6
pm
as many as 670
passengers
. And there were three times that refused a drastic decrease, namely at 4
pm
230
passengers
,
second
at 2
pm
290, and
finally
at 10
pm
300
passengers
. The increase and decrease in
passengers
are
also
followed
also followed
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apply
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by high and low train ticket prices. At 12 noon the check
pay
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payment
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is quite high at $ 31, the
second
high license pay is at 8 am for $ 29,
the
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and the
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third
at 6 am for $ 23. At 6
pm
the check pay drops dramatically
at
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to
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$ 11,
second
in
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at
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4
pm
at $ 17, and
finally
at 10
pm
at $ 18. As a whole, it can be seen the interconnected relationship between the number of
passengers
and record prices. But at night it becomes an exception license price decline.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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