the chart below shows the number of passengers arriving at a train station per hour across a day,and also the average price (in US DOllars) of their tickets.

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table provides information about the number of

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arriving at the train station per hour per day and the average ticket

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at a certain time. From the table, we can see that there were three times that reached a high number of

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at 12 noon as many as 700

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at 8 am as many as 690

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, and at 6

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as many as 670

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. And there were three times that refused a drastic decrease, namely at 4

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230

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second

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at 2

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290, and

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at 10

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300

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. The increase and decrease in

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are

also

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followed

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also followed

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by high and low train ticket prices. At 12 noon the check

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is quite high at $ 31, the

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second

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high license pay is at 8 am for $ 29,

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at 6 am for $ 23. At 6

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$ 11,

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at $ 17, and

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at 10

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at $ 18. As a whole, it can be seen the interconnected relationship between the number of

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and record prices. But at night it becomes an exception license price decline.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words passengers, second, pm with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

203 words

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