The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The main topic
talk
about a way to make better the Change the verb form
talks
environment
confirming the fact that only Governments and Large companies can do it instead
a
single person not.
In my opinion Change preposition
of a
Government
could improve the Correct article usage
the Government
environment
giving
some tips to guide the population Change preposition
by giving
such
as recycling with criteria, reduce
the Wrong verb form
reducing
consume
of Replace the word
consumption
plastic
Add an article
a plastic
bottle
or better don't Fix the agreement mistake
bottles
use
plastic at all also
if this
can be difficult, or pay
attention to the temperature of our house we don't need to stay at 25 Wrong verb form
paying
degree
, Change to a plural noun
degrees
also
when we cook we have to use
not a lot of gas etc. In fact here could be useful the intervention of Large companies because a lot of products are packed by
plastic because it is cheap and consequential Change preposition
with
also
many products are cheap than other
which are created Fix the agreement mistake
others
followed
the criteria of sustainability. So Wrong verb form
following
this
may be one of the principal motivation
of why some people decide to buy a product than Fix the agreement mistake
motivations
other
.
Correct pronoun usage
others
To
the other Change preposition
On
hand
Add a comma
,hand
this
is only a small part that we can do for
make a difference in Change preposition
to
environment
, indeed we have to understand that there are a lot of right things that we can follow, Add an article
the environment
such
as the use
of bicycle
Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
instead
the car, also
the use
of public transport in fact
there is difference between Add the comma(s)
, in fact,
use
a car for 10 Change the form of the verb
using
person
Change to a plural noun
people
for example
, instead
one bus for the same numbers. And in this
the approach of governments is fundamental because Add a comma
,this
for
make an eco-friendly city must Change preposition
to
be need
to some works like the building of street only for bike etc. In Change the verb form
need
conclusion
Add a comma
,conclusion
I'm agree
as regards that Change the verb form
I agree
government
and big companies can work together Correct article usage
the government
for
make difference but only Change preposition
to
for give
to people the right examples to follow and do what a person can't do by himself, but Correct your spelling
forgive
I'm
Change the verb form
I also disagree
also
disagree because we all can do a small part to reduce the impact of environment
.Add an article
the environment
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Vocabulary: Replace the words environment, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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