The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The main topic
talk
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talks
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about a way to make better the
environment
confirming the fact that only Governments and Large companies can do it
instead
a
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of a
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single person not. In my opinion
Government
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the Government
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could improve the
environment
giving
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by giving
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some tips to guide the population
such
as recycling with criteria,
reduce
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reducing
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the
consume
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of
plastic
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a plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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or better don't
use
plastic at all
also
if
this
can be difficult, or
pay
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paying
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attention to the temperature of our house we don't need to stay at 25
degree
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,
also
when we cook we have to
use
not a lot of gas etc. In fact here could be useful the intervention of Large companies because a lot of products are packed
by
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with
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plastic because it is cheap and consequential
also
many products are cheap than
other
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others
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which are created
followed
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following
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the criteria of sustainability. So
this
may be one of the principal
motivation
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motivations
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of why some people decide to buy a product than
other
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others
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.
To
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the other
hand
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this
is only a small part that we can do
for
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to
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make a difference in
environment
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the environment
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, indeed we have to understand that there are a lot of right things that we can follow,
such
as the
use
of
bicycle
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bicycles
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instead
the car,
also
the
use
of public transport
in fact
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there is difference between
use
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using
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a car for 10
person
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people
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for example
,
instead
one bus for the same numbers. And in
this
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the approach of governments is fundamental because
for
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to
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make an eco-friendly city must
be need
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need
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to some works like the building of street only for bike etc. In
conclusion
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I'm agree
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as regards that
government
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the government
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and big companies can work together
for
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to
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make difference but only
for give
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forgive
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to people the right examples to follow and do what a person can't do by himself, but
I'm
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I also disagree
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also
disagree because we all can do a small part to reduce the impact of
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the environment
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, instead, such".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words environment, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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