the graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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some data between
death
and
birth
in New Zealand from 1901 till to give information on the future 2021. From 1902 to 2001 the
line
of
birth
was biggest than
death
, indeed we can see that it was always among 20.00/ 50.00/ 70.00 births at
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contrary to the
line
of
death
which didn’t increase quickly like the black
line
, in fact
in
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the
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1961 it rose till almost 70.00
birth
.
Whereas
about the prevision
on
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the
future
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the situation will
be change
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drastically because the grey
line
will jump from almost 28.00
death
in 2001
at
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almost 49.00
death
in 2042, till
to
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it
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meet the
line
of
birth
. In
brief
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we can see that the
line
of
death
will be to grow
at
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the
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contrary
the
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line
of
birth
which
instead
will
be decrease
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be decreased
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. So we can confirm that in the future will be more
death
that
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than
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birth
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words death, birth, line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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