The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates how many males and females
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studied in
full-time
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the full-time
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and part-time discipline in the following years: 1970 to 1971, 1980 to 1981 and 1990 to 1991.
It is clear that
in all three time
periods
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more people of both sexes were involved in part-time training than
fulltime
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.
Overall
the total of men in
fulltime
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discipline rose from approximately 100
thousand
to 200
thousand
,
whereas
the number of men in part-time education was lower in the early nineties than twenty years earlier. As far as women are concerned, the numbers increased in both sectors of education. The number of part-time female students increased dramatically from 700
thousand
to 1.2 million in the
twenty year
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period. The
amount
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of women in
fulltime
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education went up more gradually from 100
thousand
in 1971 to just over 200
thousand
in 1991.
This
was
similarly
the increase for
fulltime
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male students.
To sum up
, the figure
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women in both sectors increased significantly
while
it seems that the rate of men entering part-time information decreased a little and was fluctuating
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