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It is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With technology innovation and automation in various sectors, organisations are left with no alternative but to replace experienced employees with fresh graduates.
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, many argue that the employer should enhance skills of present
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, rather than laying off.
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, In my opinion, Industries should not replace qualified by inexperienced workers.  On one hand, every
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 requires desired skill and qualification. Because, most of the experienced employees have spent a good number of hours in learning and development of products,
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, they better understand the pros and cons of the
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. Whereas, in some cases, an
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 needs to upgrade his knowledge, I.e., learning new software or new machinery manuals.
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, in my organisation, the account team was sent on a four week training program to learn SAP in order to work swiftly.
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, our company did not hire new people but trained the existing ones.
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, recruiting inexperienced individuals over current workforce, not only impacts financially but affects
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 productivity. By appointment of new
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 over experienced
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, the sense of
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 security rises within the company, which can result in poor
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 performance and low morale.
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, the companies who replace its
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 often tend to spend more rehiring new employees and are time consuming.
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, younger employees are no bargain, when it comes to replacing existing. In conclusion, I feel, the organisations should focus more on building
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 skills.
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, they are easy to train and,
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, they know their
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 well and understand the company’s culture well. Whereas, young and fresh graduates, costs more to the company and affects
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 morale.
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