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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing some things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #change
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Modification is necessary for everyone in various stages of
life
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. There are some people who love to do different things in their
life
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.
However
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, some people do not like to change different things
such
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 as
work
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, nature, lifestyle and many more in their
life
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. To embark on, there are some factors which affect
mindset
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the mindset
 of people to do regular things.
Firstly
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, the main reason is safety of
work
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. People do repetitive tasks in their daily routine
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life even
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life, even
 after feeling bored and exhausted from that type of
work
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, because they do not want to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 their job, which is a restriction to them to learn new skills.
Secondly
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, they have restricted thoughts in their mind. People have fixed some illusions which control their mind to avoid doing new things unless until they have been forced by some situations. As an instance, a
peon
a writing implement with a point from which ink flows
pen
 or a driver has a habit to listen order of their employer, and they spent their whole
life
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 by doing
same thing
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the same thing
 with less earning without thinking out of it.
This
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 is like
frogs
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the frogs
 of well who have
birth
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birthed
 in a well, spend their
life
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 in that well without coming out of it, and die in the same well.
However
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, there are some people who
revolute
evaluate or estimate the nature, quality, ability, extent, or significance of
evaluate
 their lifestyle by doing new things everyday. The main reason is they love to take risks. Some people always want to make their
life
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 adventurous by taking risks and learning new things from their achievements.
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, the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 important factor is their
goals
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goal
. These people have motive to live their
life
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 like a king. They set some goals and
work
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 for it by quitting their boring regular
life
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 and exceeding their limitations. To illustrate, the famous Indian cricketer Mahendrasingh Dhoni was a conductor, but he always wanted to play for his country, and he worked hard and now he is one of the best captains of Indian team. To conclude, as per my opinion, people should change some things from them like mindset, attitude, lifestyle and many more as per their dreams and goals, if they do not want to be a frog
of
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in
 a well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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