In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
These days, student
behaviour
is causing serious problems in schools in many countries. Lack of attention
by parents and access to the internet
might be the major factors of this
trend.
Firstly
, lack of care and attention
to children by parents can be a result of being in the workplace the whole day and working overtime to keep their position at work
, and trying to improve their income. However
, by doing so, they are, also
, increasing the responsibility and obligations in the work
, thus
they cannot allocate enough time for their children
Suggestion
children's
child's
child
behaviour
. In overseas, for example
, most of the parents hire special people from organisations, especially strangers, to look after their children in
-home, as they spend much of their time outside, far away from their children. Suggestion
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Therefore
, as they cannot control how the children are upbringing, the children may have ill-behaviour
in the future. Thus
, the parents should cut the time allocated for work
, and be more with their children, to prevent bad actions done by them because of their behaviour
, like being unemployed or even being murder
, in the future.
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murdered
Secondly
, the internet
becoming really common among youngsters, especially playing video games. Nowadays, for example
, we can be a witness to this
action even during lessons in many schools and they may not pay attention
to the lesson. They play games on their smartphones/iPods, rather than doing something useful and essential, like watching the news or educational/motivational videos on the internet
. The actions in the war games which they play may be repeated by them in real life, like fighting with classmates, or with even teachers. The government should let the youngsters to use the internet
access for opening only educational and upbringing webpages
, not games or other services.
In conclusion, both parents and the government should pay more Suggestion
web pages
attention
to upbringing children, than the work
or the industry, to make their behaviour
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