Children nowadays watch significantly more television than those in the past, which reduces their activities levels accordingly. Why is this case? What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

In today’s world, as becoming a basic device, television has played an entertaining role in every family. It is the best friend for kids at
home which
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home, which
leads to a problem that
child
prefer watching
TV
all-day to doing some outdoor activities.
Although
this
trend arose many disadvantages, there are many solutions to it.
First
, it
can not
can not
cannot
be denied that technology has made
many
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much
progess
gradual improvement or growth or development
progress
in modern life. Due to the signification of
telecomunications
(often plural) systems used in transmitting messages over a distance electronically
telecommunications
, everyone should own at least a
TV
. Because of its convenience, parents who are
alway
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
away
busy use television as a ‘babysitter’- taking
care
of their children and interesting
them
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
theme
.
Thus
, kids spend on watching
TV
a remarkable time of a day. Gradually, the children have been so familiar with it that they do not know anything outside their home or even
care
about their parents. In general, parents taking advantage of
TV
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a TV
the TV
too much with lacking of
care
push their kids into dangerous circumstance, less physical activities.
However
, fortunately, parents still have a lot of chances to encourage their kids with numerous methods. Nowadays,
besides
main classes’ lessons, school has many
extracurriculums
such
as painting, musical instruments, basketball,...
clubs
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Clubs
which force students to join in. Through those classes, children can get more exercises and gain wonderful skills.
Moreover
, parents should not be so strict with
kids
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the kids
. Allowing them to hang out with friends is a great idea for the
child
to become sociable and dynamic.
Finally
, the most important cure is parents’
care
.
Mom
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Mum
and dad ought to talk or gossip with the
child
about their hobbies, dreams or just daily activities and give them advices, experiences.
Family
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The family
spend
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spends
weekend day to go outside,
pinic
of a light shade of red
pink
is a way to not only distract the
child
from
TV
at
home but
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home, but
also
create a close-knit relationship between parents and kids. In conclusion,
although
this
trend
recently raise
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have recently raised
some potentially serious
prolems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
when kids do not as active as previous generations, parents should
also
review themselves in
child’s
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the child’s
a child’s
caring, not only blame on television.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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