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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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It is certainly true that using chemicals to produce and preserve food is beneficial, but the question is whether its benefits are greater than its drawbacks or not.
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 essay will discuss
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 issue. On the one hand, It is evidently clear that the vast majority of companies around the world prone to use food additives to preserve it.
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, if they did not use it, most kinds of eatables would not actually
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 that long time.
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, they use
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 artificial colouring to encourage people to purchase supplies that might not be tempted to eat.
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, according to an article published in The New York Times, about 80% of food companies are depending on placing chemicals in eatables in order to ensure that it will be sold down the road.
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, It is undeniable that preservation of foodstuff through using additional substances have a lot of negative influences on people who eat the preserved fare on a regular basis.Unfortunately, the human's body cannot digest those chemicals so it affects the liver and kidneys in an extremely toxic way.
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 has been scientifically proven that consuming the inorganic fare is closely related to many health issues
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 as liver cirrhosis and failure of the kidneys.
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, It is agreed that eating fresh eats is safer than eating the preserved meals. In conclusion, In the light of what have been discussed, Despite the fact that there are benefits from using chemicals in foodstuff, It still poses a threat to the public health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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