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Write a letter to your manager why you want to work in the company's head office for six months.

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The purpose of
this
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 letter is to express my interest in working at the head office of our company, in Tokyo, for the
first
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 half of the
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 year.
Firstly
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, I would like to mention that my commitment and willingness to
work
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 hard is evident from the fact that I was awarded Employee of the Year
last
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 month. Working at the head office would help me gain diverse skills and knowledge which, in turn, would prove beneficial for our local office. As you know, my
work
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 mainly consists of designing on a laptop. While I am in Tokyo, I would still be able to devote part-time hours to manage the ongoing projects here.
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, with your permission, I am willing to train my assistant to handle my
work
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 temporarily. I would be grateful if you could provide me
a
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with a
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laptop with a licenced version of the software "AutoCAD" installed for my
work
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.
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, I request that my airline tickets to Tokyo be reimbursed.
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Yours
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Your
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 sincerely,

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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