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Some people think that computers are more of a hindrance than a help in today’s society. Others believe that they are such indispensable tools that we would not be able to live or work without them. Discuss both opinions and give yours.

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Nowadays some people think that computers are an obstacle in society, others believe that we would not be able to live without them. I believe that computers are very
useful but
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useful, but
 there should be a limitation to
use
 it. In
this
 essay I will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 both viewpoints and
then
 give my opinion on the topic.
Today computers
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Today, computers
 have found a permanent place in the workplace In my opinion they have made our lives easier and convenient in numerous ways.
For example
, students can
use
 their laptops for research, get more information, and create presentations for school, a businessman can close a deal without big efforts staying at home.
That
Suggestion
That's
 because they offer many ways to communicate with each other with
e-mail
(computer science) a system of world-wide electronic communication in which a computer user can compose a message at one terminal that can be regenerated at the recipient's terminal when the recipient logs in
email
, chatting, video chat and we can now do our tasks more easily than before.
On the other hand
, computers can bring some disadvantages in fact they reduce social life. Game and other applications installed on computers can be addictive. Lots of young people prefer to spend their time at home in front of a computer than socialize, they live in the world of games isolated from the real one. If the individual time is spent excessively on accessing the internet, there will be a shortage of real conversation.
As a result
this
 situation can make a relationship with family or friends deteriorate. In conclusion, according to both viewpoints, computers are indispensable in our
lives but
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lives, but
 if we
use
 them incorrectly they can be a hindrance than a help. I firmly believe that computers are very important in people’s lives, but there should be some limitations to
use
 it.
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