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Today more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think the benefits of this outweighs the disadvantages?

#students #move #country #studies
Nowadays schooling in foreign countries is common,
hence
 earning living more ever studying to explore the world. Every
day
 colossal number of students migrating in a broad, almost in English or developed countries for
furthermore
 learning. Huge percentage of students visiting other countries and live with their families. Because to improving their lifestyle to find high quality of life. Mostly
this
 migration is developing countries to developed countries, developing nations not able to provide fundamental resources for their people, the masses could not find their a luxury things or higher education. So individuals
day
 by
day
Accept comma addition
day, move
move
 in developing countries for education and to have a new experience in other places.
For instance
, many countries have the most population,
suchsuch as India
Suggestion
such as India
such such as India
, Pakistan, Bangladesh but they have not much resources, giving jobs to younger, or the government has not invested in businesses. Another hand, some countries is developing more there's a lot of companies
,
Accept space
,
markets so they require labour on a bigger level so that's useful for students
move
 in other countries and to get opportunities. Obviously younger from developing countries go to other places, so
their
people in general
they
 economy fell down
day
 by
day
 quickly. Because of not having businesses money, etc.
and
Suggestion
And
 richer people become rich every
day
.
For example
 the Russian government provides their people a lot of opportunities, they improve their financial situation of country while African
move
 other countries and do job their they fell down. In conclusion, state of poor nations if
move
 in other countries, there they have more disadvantages
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 benefits. Meanwhile, the poor become much poor and richer become richer.
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