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Nowadays companies and other organizations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform?

In
this
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 technical era, many companies and
organizations
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organisations
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enforcing
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are enforcing
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 their
employees
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 to wear a uniform.
As
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apply
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,
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apply
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it
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 gives a specific identity to a person.
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 essay will highlight that
this
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 is certainly an advantageous despite a few inevitable drawbacks.
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, wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 to work
place
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workplace
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 gives a unique identity to the
employees
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.
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this
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also
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improve
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improves
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 the personality of
employees
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 as per the
organization's
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 reputation. To explain
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, it is widely said that first impression is the
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 impression.
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, a
well dressed
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 person feels confident,
as a result
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, they can deal with their clients in a very polite way, which
also
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improve
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improves
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 the chances of getting appreciation from their clients.
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, from an
employee
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employee's
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 point of
view
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view,
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 a specific dress
also
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 saves their money and
make
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makes
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 them
tension free
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tension-free
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 regards their daily choice of clothes
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 they do not have to buy new clothes often.
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,
although
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this
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 is
the
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 matter of concern for some companies, as they have to provide dress to their
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employees
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employees,
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that
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which
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increase
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increases
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 the operating cost of industries.
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,
travel
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with
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 an official dress to differentiate the destination related to office work
also
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 advertises the company name.
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 but not least, uniforms help to make
good
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a good
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 working environment at
job
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a job
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 because
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apply
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 it has
also
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 been
proved
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proven
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 in a survey conducted on
the
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apply
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employee productivity that indicates that an
individual
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individual's
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 productivity
increase
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increases
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alone
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apply
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by 70% by dressing uniformly for the job.
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-
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although
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 it might
expensive
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be expensive
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for
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from
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 an
employer
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employer's
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 point of view, a feeling of inspiration in the
performance place
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workplace
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 brought by dresses improves the productivity of the companies.

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grammar
Your plan is clear with 'Firstly', 'Secondly' and 'Finally', but many sentences are hard to read and have small grammar errors.
structure
Each idea should be in its own paragraph. Add a paragraph that talks about a negative side and how to fix it.
lexical
Some phrases are not easy to get. Try to use simple, exact words. Example: 'In this era, many firms ask workers to wear a uniform.'
content
Give real, easy examples to back up your points. For example: 'Uniforms save time choosing clothes; they also show a strong brand.'
content
The list of ideas is on one topic: uniforms.
structure
There is a clear ending sentence that restates the view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniform policy
  • corporate identity
  • work attire
  • equality
  • professionalism
  • brand image
  • personal expression
  • dress code
  • morale
  • team cohesion
  • security measures
  • cost implication
  • employee satisfaction
  • workplace culture
  • individuality
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