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It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #places #proportion #people
It is argued that providing higher
education
 for a high percentage of youngsters is not only impossible but
also
 useless. Personally, while I believe that we cannot offer a huge number of young people a chance to learn at tertiary
education
, I agree that it is beneficial for the youth to go to college. On the one hand, it is impossible to provide almost all youngsters with access to higher
education
. The
first
 reason is that the financial ability of the government is not able to offer most of young people to attend a university because the payment for building more campuses would be prohibitive. If the government offer places in universities for most youngsters
,t
Accept space
,
he entrance mark of these colleges may would be lowered in order to match with the
education
 level of youngsters which makes the teaching quality go down.
On the other hand
, university
education
 plays a vital role in the future of young people in
this
 knowledge-based society w
ith
Suggestion
by
in
providing students with higher career prospects. By entering colleges, students may stand a good chance to cultivate their practical skills
such
 as interpersonal and team-working skills while still can focus on theoretical knowledge
.
Accept space
.
As a result
, young people attending tertiary
education
 tend to get a well-paid job in the long run. In conclusion, while university
education
 might benefit students, I still believe that the idea of providing tertiary
education
 for a large number of young people is impossible.
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