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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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This
 line graph
demonsteates
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demonstrates
 the
feguirse
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figures
 of students
how
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who
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compelte
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complete
 the university in Canada between 1992 and 2007. It is clear from the graph that
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of men and women has
rose
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risen
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 through
of
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7 years.
according to
 what is shown, the learners of
graduated
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who graduated
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from
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as
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males
was
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were
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 not common in
period
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the period
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 of 1992 to 1995.
Then
 there was a kind of steady for 5 years,
However
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 the
males
 started
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to go
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to go
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go
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to go
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 up
stablely
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stably
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from
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since
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from
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 2000 until 2006.
While
 the
numbers
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number
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 of graduated females as
males
 as, but they were less than
males
, but the
porpotion
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proportion
portion
 of women that passed a phase of
bachular
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bachelor
 degree between 1996 and 2000 was different from the men. As happened with
males
, the
numbers
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number
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 of graduates of women increased significantly from 2000 to 2006.
to sum
up
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 we could say that both sexes have the same rise and down through the same period of time, but
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the figuers
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figuers
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figures
of
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males
is
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 still more than females.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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