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People have different expectations for jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company whereas others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many people face the dilemma of having to decide whether they should change their jobs or not. While some argue that remaining the same job is more beneficial, I would argue that it is better to change their
position
 frequently. On the one hand, keeping doing the same job is attractive for several reasons. The
first
 rationale for
this
 is that a person who has been working in a
position
 for a long period of time can have a sufficient understanding of their tasks and company. In
this
 way, they can get promotion or be offered for a better
position
. Another reason is that it could be very risky to change the job because they have to take a probationary period in the new company. After that if they do not pass their criteria,
for example
, they could be unemployed.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that changing occupation will be more beneficial. Many young people do not know exactly what
position
 they would like to do and which one they could do best.
In other words
, trying to work in different jobs can help many people realize their own career and avoid wasting a great deal of time on the wrong jobs. In terms of skills, a person who has worked as many positions or distinct
firms
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
forms
,
for instance
, may gain a huge variety of real experience and learn practical skills, and
such
 people tend to be more dynamic and have a higher adaptability. In sum, I would argue that people are more likely to derive more benefits from changing jobs regularly than continuing the same profession for the same company.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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