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Children should play online games nowadays. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

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Multiplayer games nowadays have become very popular especially to the youth of today's generation.
This
 essay will discuss the positive sides of online gaming as well
as negative aspect of
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as a negative aspect of
 games based on online system. On the one hand,
thousants
the cardinal number that is the product of 10 and 100
thousands
 of online games are now wide spread at the circles of the World Wide Web which allows players to play in similar game setting at the same time. Video games allow players to build their own networks of alliance which promotes interaction between the individuals since they need to support each other in order to win the game,
also
,
this
 will help players to build teamwork.
Therefore
, if children
stops
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stop
 playing multiplayer game and remove them completely from their circle of entertainment, it will impede children's pursuit of interest and enthusiasm and
consequently
 they will be reluctant to study.
Moreover
, very many games are installed in several levels or missions by the company so that
this
can helps
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can help
 the kids
in learning about management
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learning about management
 in a way that online gaming makes the kid sharper and mentally more active.
On the other hand
,
online games
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the online games
also
 have the same missing effects which directly affect the development of kids. Since they are playing with multiple other players, they cannot just stop from playing because
this
 will affect the network and
this
 will require children to play in long hours.
This
 means that due to the long hours of playing numerous health problems may be acquired
such
 as eye or
corpal
of or relating to the wrist
carpal
carpel
 tunnel syndrome, poor postures and severe stress on nerves.
Furthermore
,
this
 breaks their connection with the
enviroment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 which can not only diminish their natural social connections, but
also
 leave them more depressed and passive, even vulgar. In conclusion,
although
 video games allow children to improve their social interaction capacity, it is still important for every
kids
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kid
 to spend
whole their time
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their whole time
 on other activities in a health way.
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