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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less.

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Past few decades, the consumption of soft drinks
has drastically enlarged
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drastically enlarged
, which ruins people's health.
This
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 essay will discuss the potential causes of the above notion, along with the remedies to curb it.
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 with, the reasons behind the high rate of consumption regarding soft drinks are people following the attractive ad campaign on social media and TV.
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, they are imitating their celebrity idols from commercials, and they do not notice that they are becoming zombie consumers, of the most substantial soft drink companies around the globe. Nowadays, in a competitive market, soft drink manufacturers promoting their products with the face of celebrities;
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, many youngsters attracted to
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 unhealthy drinks.
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, the drinks compose of sugar as its main ingredient, which produces sweet taste and the people get the affection to the before-mentioned goods.
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, Spain football superstars,
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 as Leonel Messi and Neymar are promoting soft drink company Pepsi,
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 many football fans start buying the product after commercials to imitate their idols.
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, fast-food ad campaigns constantly provoke people to think that soft drinks must product with any meal. Somehow, they are not mentioning the disadvantages of the product and deterioration in the consumer's health.
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, by conducting a few preventive steps one can reduce the habit of drinking
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 unhealthy drinks.
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, people should develop a habit to read all the descriptions of the soft drinks, which they are going to consume.
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 all the soft drinks not having excessive sugar, they should adopt
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 alternative products.
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, the parents should guide their adolescents not to imitate everything which is broadcasted on TV and social media advertisements and aware
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 about the potential negative side of
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 products.
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, the government should run awareness campaigns throughout the country about a healthy diet.
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, the Fit India campaign has integrated many citizens towards healthy diets.
Lastly
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, the government should run awareness campaigns throughout the country about a healthy diet.
For example
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, the Fit India campaign has integrated many citizens towards healthy diets.
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