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This line graph represents how much wast was produced by three factories between 2000 and 2015.

This line graph represents how much wast was produced by three factories between 2000 and 2015.
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It is clear from the graph that
the
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group A was the highest in
the
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most of the period given,
while
 party
C
 was
lowest
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, and regarding
to
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graph
it
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compare
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 the waste
was
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produced in
tonnes
 by three different factories from 2000 to 2015.
To begin
 with the first five years of each industry,
the
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team A was the highest in that period, but it regularly drops from 12
tonnes
 to about 10.
While
 group B
increase
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 sharply,
also
 company
C
 rose gradually from 3 to 6
tonnes
. Moving to the
next
 five years, both
of
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the A,
B
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factories
have
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declined, but factory
C
 still went up slightly.
The
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last
 five years
the
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group A went down slowly
,
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 when compared with company B that fall sharply to almost 3
tonnes
, except the company
C
 which went up to about
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words c, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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