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This line graph represents how much wast was produced by three factories between 2000 and 2015.

This line graph represents how much wast was produced by three factories between 2000 and 2015.
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It is clear from the graph that
the
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group A was the highest in
the
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most of the period given,
while
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 party
C
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 was
lowest
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the lowest
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, and regarding
to
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graph
it
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compare
Correct subject-verb agreement
compares
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 the waste
was
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produced in
tonnes
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 by three different factories from 2000 to 2015.
To begin
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 with the first five years of each industry,
the
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team A was the highest in that period, but it regularly drops from 12
tonnes
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 to about 10.
While
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 group B
increase
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increased
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 sharply,
also
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 company
C
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 rose gradually from 3 to 6
tonnes
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. Moving to the
next
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 five years, both
of
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the A,
B
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and B
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factories
have
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declined, but factory
C
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 still went up slightly.
The
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In the
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last
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 five years
the
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group A went down slowly
,
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 when compared with company B that fall sharply to almost 3
tonnes
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, except the company
C
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 which went up to about

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words c, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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