This line graph represents how much wast was produced by three factories between 2000 and 2015.
It is clear from the graph that
the
group A was the highest in Correct article usage
apply
the
most of the period given, Correct article usage
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while
party C
was lowest
, and regarding Correct article usage
the lowest
to
graph Remove the preposition
apply
it
Correct pronoun usage
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compare
the waste Correct subject-verb agreement
compares
was
produced in Unnecessary verb
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tonnes
by three different factories from 2000 to 2015.
To begin
with the first five years of each industry, the
team A was the highest in that period, but it regularly drops from 12 Remove the article
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tonnes
to about 10.
While
group B increase
sharply, Wrong verb form
increased
also
company C
rose gradually from 3 to 6 tonnes
.
Moving to the next
five years, both of
the A,Change preposition
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B
factories Correct word choice
and B
have
declined, but factory Unnecessary verb
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C
still went up slightly.
The
Change preposition
In the
last
five years the
group A went down slowlyCorrect article usage
apply
,
when compared with company B that fall sharply to almost 3 Remove the comma
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tonnes
, except the company C
which went up to aboutSubmitted by aabdurahima on
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