The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the evolution of the
birth
and the death
rate
in New Zealand in the period between two centuries, from 1901 to 2101, and in
general
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we see that the
birth
curve has an irregular behaviour,
instead
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the other one has a regular growing trend. We notice that the peak of the
birth
rate
is between 1941 and 1961, and it is about 70 thousand,
instead
, in the years before we can see an irregular curve with frequent rise and fall, starting from the lowest
value
in 1901, with 20000 births. After
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1961 we see fluctuations from 50000 to 65000, with a drastic decrease in 1981,
then
the
value
falls slowly in a linear way to 40000. The behaviour of the death curve is more regular, it starts from a
value
of 10 thousand in 1901 and
then
rises constantly until 2041
,
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when the
value
is fixed to about 60 thousand.
Finally
, we can notice that until
the
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2041
birth
rate
is much higher than the other one, changing the trend that until 2000 see the death
rate
half
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, value with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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