With the increasing demand for energy oil and gas, people should be look for sources of oil and gas in remote an untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas?

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Over the past decades,
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energy crisis
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the energy crisis
has become tremendously serious and it is an area of focus to
general public
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the general public
. Many propose that efforts should be paid
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to finding
and harness new natural resources, especially gas and
oil
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, in remote or unexploited places.
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, despite some benefits could be brought by
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proposal, I believe that its drawbacks greatly outnumber the advantages. People who advocate
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resort may cite the following reasons.
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, it could greatly contribute to the sustainability of macro-economic performance.
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is because while the consumption of petroleum has increased exponentially due to ever-growing population and rapid industrialization, existing resources have become progressively depleted.
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,
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practice could help remote inhabitants break vicious cycle of poverty. Noticeably, the majority of isolated areas are undeveloped with
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and poor-qualified public facilities.
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, the inflow of
energy
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companies
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companies'
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investment in infrastructure constructions is believed to improve living conditions, create more jobs, lifting rural regions out of poverty. Notwithstanding the aforesaid opinions, I would argue that
potential benefits
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the potential benefits
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strategy could never overshadow its drawbacks. Remarkably, drilling
oil
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in untouched areas would be at the expense of eco-balance. Albeit invisibly, ruining undiscovered places to give way to the erection of
oil
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rigs and
energy
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plants may result in chronic and irreversible consequences
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as soil erosion, flood, wildlife extinction, etc. Eventually, human will fall victim to
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snow-ball effects.
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, after being exploited for long period of time, lands will become exhausted, making us to continuously seeking for another new
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source
;
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, it is just
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a temporary solution
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. In fact, many countries have successfully harnessed eco-friendly resources which are widely available and conveniently approachable without damaging environment
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as wind, solar, tide and geothermal
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.
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, discovering innovative technologies to environmentally and friendly harness easily assessable
energy
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resources is a more practical and promising measure. To conclude, under no circumstances, should people underestimate the disadvantages of exploiting gas and
oil
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resources in rural areas. For the reasons stated above, I opine that the drawbacks of
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resort outweigh its positive sides and may be harmful to the environment.
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