The table below shows the results of a 20-year study into why adults in the UK attend arts events. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows in percentage the motivation why the adults in the UK go to arts events
In the
last
two decades, with chronological
step of ten Add an article
the chronological
a chronological
years
.
It can be clearly seen that in the whole 20 years
adults attends
arts, mostly because they Change the verb form
attend
was
moved by the desire to see a specific performer or artist, in fact, Change the verb form
were
this
percentage is greater than 55% all time, and 20 years
ago it reached the peak of 58%.
On the contrary
, we can see that work and business aim stays stable below 11%, but we can see a soft increase in this
statistic that 20 years
ago was only 6%, that
denotes a global disinterest in these fields for economic aims.
In the Correct pronoun usage
which
last
two decades, we can see that the choice to attend arts for a special occasion or to celebrate events, decrease drastically by 27% to 9 %, on the contrary
, there was an increasing interest for adults accompanying children to these types of events, in fact, today this
reason occupies a quarter of the reported data.Submitted by lindstedt on
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