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The internet has transformed lives and economies but it is turning the world into a global village. Soon everybody will think and behave in the same way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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It is often argued that the
internet
 is turning the world the world into
global village
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a global village
 and all the people will think and behave in the same way. I more agree than disagree with
this
 statement. There are no doubts that
internet
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the internet
 changed our lives. It resolved one of the biggest problems of
20th century
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the 20th century
 by expanding the variety and speed of spreading of information. Thanks to
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 humanity entered the new era of digital technology. All the machines that usually could do only 1 type of work became more complex and convenient. And these machines took a part of work that only people could do before. That allows people
switch
Suggestion
to switch
 their attention to other problems, and of course caused numerous new problems. Of course, the
internet
 connects people, it makes us closer to each other.
This
 is one of the reasons of its creations But, it cannot change our life so dramatically until we literally move and stay
into
Suggestion
in
 it. To make the statement come true the
internet
 must substitute all circumstances that affect our
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and thinking. And the
internet
 is absolutely do not able to do that. It could impose on us some new common habits, no more than that. For an
example I
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example, I
 have a few best friends. We all are from different cities and even countries. And despite that we communicate mainly using the
internet
, and we waste very much time in it, we still the different people each with his own
characters
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characteristic
character
 features.
Untill
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Until
 the
internet
 cannot substitute all our environment, culture, education and until it does not satisfy all our
needs
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needs in this situation
this
 situation will never happen.
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