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The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 the relationship between the
government
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's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the
number
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 of
people
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 participating in
Arts
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 events in the years mentioned. From the chart below we can deduce that the spending of the
Government
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 on the
Arts
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were
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 quite similar in 1995 and 2005. The major change is
on
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"Theatre"
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 field where compared with 1995, the spending almost doubled. Despite
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this
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 change, the
number
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 of
people
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 going
at
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theatre
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 did not
increased
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 significantly.
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, we can find almost the same amount of
people
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 participating in
arts
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 events in 2005 compared with 1995. The spending of the
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 on visual
arts
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 suffered a major change
,
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 and was reduced, and almost proportional
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number
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 of
people
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 interested in visual
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 was diminished in 2005. Music is the most popular art form and in 1995 the
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 spent
most
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 money on
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, but the amount they spent
on
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 1995 dropped slightly in 2005.
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However
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 attending music events raised a lot between 1995 and 2005.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, number, people, arts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget allocation
  • noticeable rise
  • sharper increase
  • upward trend
  • distribution
  • participation rates
  • government funding
  • arts events
  • financial commitment
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