The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts how many people attended drama, painting,
sculpture
and
language
courses
at an educational facility in 2009.
On the other hand
, the pie chart illustrates how the participants were divided
in
Change the preposition
into
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five
age
groups.
Firstly
, the most striking feature is that the most popular lessons were
language
and painting. It can be noticed the
language
course
had the highest
number
of participants that stood at 60 of which 20 were men and the
number
of women was double.
On the other hand
, the least popular
courses
were drama and
sculpture
which had a
number
of 30 and 15 participants, respectively. Interestingly, the
number
of women exceeded the
number
of men in all
courses
, except the
sculpture
course
.
Secondly
, it is more than obvious from the pie chart that the evening
courses
were more appealing to adults above the
age
of 50. That
age
group was followed by the 40-49 and 30-39
age
groups at 26% and 16%, respectively. The least interested people in attending evening lessons were those aged 20-29 and below 20. In conclusion, the
language
course
was the most popular
in contrast
to the
sculpture
course
which was the least popular.
Moreover
, the
number
of women attending lessons far exceeded the
number
of men.
Furthermore
, adults older than 50 had the highest interest,
while
people under the
age
of 20 showed almost no interest in evening
courses
.
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