The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts how many people attended drama, painting,
sculpture
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and
language
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courses
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at an educational facility in 2009.
On the other hand
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, the pie chart illustrates how the participants were divided
in
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five
age
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groups.
Firstly
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, the most striking feature is that the most popular lessons were
language
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and painting. It can be noticed the
language
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course
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had the highest
number
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of participants that stood at 60 of which 20 were men and the
number
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of women was double.
On the other hand
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, the least popular
courses
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were drama and
sculpture
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which had a
number
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of 30 and 15 participants, respectively. Interestingly, the
number
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of women exceeded the
number
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of men in all
courses
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, except the
sculpture
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course
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.
Secondly
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, it is more than obvious from the pie chart that the evening
courses
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were more appealing to adults above the
age
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of 50. That
age
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group was followed by the 40-49 and 30-39
age
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groups at 26% and 16%, respectively. The least interested people in attending evening lessons were those aged 20-29 and below 20. In conclusion, the
language
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course
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was the most popular
in contrast
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to the
sculpture
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course
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which was the least popular.
Moreover
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, the
number
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of women attending lessons far exceeded the
number
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of men.
Furthermore
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, adults older than 50 had the highest interest,
while
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people under the
age
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of 20 showed almost no interest in evening
courses
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sculpture, language, courses, age, course, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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