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The table below gives information about languages with the most native speakers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about languages with the most native speakers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the data about languages, most spoken in the world, and It reports if who speaks the specific
language
 is a native
speaker
 or learned it as an additional
language
. It can be clearly seen that Mandarin Chinese is the
language
 with the largest number of
native
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a native
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speaker
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speakers
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, 900
million
,
that
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which
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is about three times the
people
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number of people
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 who talk Hindi,
that
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which
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 occupies the
second
placed
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place
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 in
this
 ranking. Mandarin is
also
 the
second
 most diffused additional
language
, behind only English,
that
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which
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 counts 603
million
of
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apply
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the speaker
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speaker
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speakers
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.
This
 statistic makes English the
second
language
most spoken
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is most spoken
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 in the world with only a difference of 150
million
 people
than
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to
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 Mandarin Chinese. The other languages have
about
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apply
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much
less
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fewer
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 speakers than the previous ones, Spanish and Hindi,
instead
was
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apply
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spoken by more than 400
million
of
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apply
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people, and a consistent number of these are native
speaker
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speakers
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, about
the
Correct article usage
apply
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90%. Portuguese and Arabic are the least spoken languages in
this
 list, and especially
the
Correct article usage
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Portuguese counts only 10
million
speaker
Change to a plural noun
speakers
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 as an additional
language
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, speaker, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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