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These days, more and more people are going to other countries. for significant periods of time, either to find job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who lived abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living and working in foreign country.

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Nowadays, taking a year out to live or study abroad is becoming increasingly popular for many people, especially young adults, there are both pros and cons to
deciding
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decide
 to do
this
. In my essay, I will discuss some of
reasons
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the reasons
 why moving abroad is popular and some of the challenges to be overcome. Let’s begin by looking at the positive side about moving away, one of the main advantages of healing overseas is that it broadens your horizons,
also
 you have a chance to meet people from different cultural backgrounds and learn to cope with foreign customs and food.
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For
Fore
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 instance, Japanese people travel every year to western
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 the warm weather,
also
 delicious foods and amazing natural sights.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, one of the consequences of travelling or
studding
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studying
 abroad is that you will accept qualifications and
languages
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language
 skills which help you to deal with a new society. Turning to the other side of the arguments, culture shock is a major problem.
many
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Many
 people who take a year out find it hard to acclimatize with new horizon
also
 with different culture according to language barrier.
this
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This
 often led to homesickness and in some cases sense of isolation.
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In
 other words, when you move abroad, you have to make a new friend and find your place in the community.
this
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This
 process takes time and can be especially changing if there is
also
 a language barrier to deal with.
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To
 sum up,
although
 starting life in
new country
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a new country
the new country
 is never easy
,
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,
people can deal with the new begging measuring the positive of better life style
also
 the negative of culture shock and language barrier personally, I believe that the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives
.
Accept space
.
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