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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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It has been argued by many people that we are encountering the environmental problems and many efforts are used to resolve
this
 issue, but it is too difficult to control. In my opinion, I think that the main reason of the environmental degradation is the trash. And I
also
 assume that
this
 issue can be solved by the
rule
 and the change of people’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
In
Suggestion
At
 the modern time, the amount of the trash has been strongly increased. So many countries are facing a difficulty of the way to remove the waste. Because of
this
 difficulty, some of them that are not
got
Suggestion
getting
 rid of go to the sea. Actually, according to a recent study, it shows that the figure of the waste in the ocean has been rapidly gone up so it causes the ocean pollution.
In addition
,
this
 situation
affect
Suggestion
affects
 many creatures
such
 as fish and bird as the fish lives in the dirty water and the bird eat rubbish, thinking that they are preys.
Although
 many countries have made efforts,
this
 issue
has been not solved
Suggestion
was not solved
wasn't solved
 until now. So, I think that there should be stronger solution and the change of
individuals
Suggestion
individual
individual's
individuals'
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
Firstly
, it is that the government makes the
rule
 to regulate the amount of the litter. Because a company throws away the huge litter, through the
rule
 to impose the cost of removing them, the amount can be decreased. And it is
also
 important that people recycle and save
goods
Suggestion
the goods
 for nature. To conclude, it is stated that all we have the problem of pollution by garbage so we have to decline them by the
rule
 and the mind for nature.
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