crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. why do you think that is? what can be done to reduce the crime rate.

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nowadays
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Nowadays
, there have been numerous problem related to
crime
.
it
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is said that
crime rate
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the crime rate
is higher in metropolitan areas than it is in rural areas.
This
problem is caused by many different reasons which will be discussed in
this
essay before the solutions to it are given. There are
number
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a number
of reasons why
this
issue exists.
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, since urban areas
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are
ethnically diverse than rural areas,
therefore likelihood
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the therefore likelihood
of conflict leading
crime
among people.
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, greater lack of mutual understanding and familiarity
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in the middle of
among
individuals in urban areas. Especially that could lead to unnecessary fight, which potentially leads to
crime
.
Second
, since a number of immigrants increase
constanlly
without variation or change, in every case
constantly
in urban areas, metropolitan areas must compete for limited opportunities and scarce sources, which would leave other individuals' life at stake.
This
means that those who cannot compete with others would have a tendency to commit
crime
that just to make a living.
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a great deal of solutions to diminish
crime
rate
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, not only in
big cities but
also
rural areas.
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enforcing stricter punishments would act as a
deterent
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deterrent
for motivation to commit
crime
. Realizing that the costs of breaking the law were higher, despite of facing serious difficulties, every potential criminal would not think twice.
Secondly
, since many offences can be traced back the lack of understanding among people from different backgrounds.
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the local official
local official
should organise many
sociocultural
activities that would improve mutual relationships and resolve conflict
.
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,
although
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the provincial capital and largest city in Ontario (and the largest city in Canada)
Toronto
is the most
multicutural
of or relating to or including several cultures
multicultural
city in the world,
crime
rate is among at the lowest thanks to
such
activities and cultural events.
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is
complicated problem
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a complicated problem
caused by many different reasons. So it is difficult to find out the
effective
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most effective
solutions.
However
, above-mentioned measures would be helpful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anonymity
  • social cohesion
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • desperation
  • urban stressors
  • mental health
  • community policing
  • job opportunities
  • poverty
  • inequality
  • public spaces
  • surveillance cameras
  • deterrent
  • recidivism
  • reintegration programs
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