Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better lime to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Wonders like science and machinery and my others thing that has changed our living standards like our food
,
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,
shelters and work and many more and
hence
increased our ages of living. Some people think
that is
the best
time
to
live
go away from a place
leave
. I agree with
this
situation but
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situation, but
there are always consequences behind every good thing. Due to advancement we got
solution
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the solution
a solution
to so many problems like during
past
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the past time
time
there was so many diseases which has no medication due to which people die without any health
care but
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care, but
today, due to progress in everything we got medication and cure to certain diseases
as a result
mortality rate has driven up.
Moreover
, people do not meet or talk to each other for
long
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a long time
time
due to lack of communication
ways but
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ways, but
due to highly progress in a mass communication and transportation, people can even talk with
help
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the help
of
internet
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the internet
and see each other every day.
In addition
to that, every work is made
easy
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easier
and less
time
consuming
.
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On the flip side, these human activities have a
devastate
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devastating
effect on our environment. Natural resources are depleting due to over usage, everyday 1000’s of trees are being cut for industrial use leading
too
in the direction of
to
deforestation. Due to globalization, every single member of a family is working every member has its own car as a consequence of
it
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its
consumption of natural resources per family is ramping
hence
result in bad effect. To conclude, advancement is necessary in every field due to
passage
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the passage
of
time but
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time, but
to manage its consumption is very important so that I does not have any bad effect
.
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