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Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice

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In recent years, cooking at home became less and less common. People have all of the opportunities to order a
food
 or go to the restaurants, and they think that cooking a
food
 is just a waste of time. But eating an ordered
food
 on an ongoing base can lead to a bad consequences.
Firstly
, one of the drawbacks of ordering
food
 is that the products
can not
can not
cannot
 be fresh. We do not anything about the freshness of the products by which or meal is made. And because of it people can obtain a
food
 poisoning.
Secondly
, people, in most cases, will spend much money than in cooking by themselves. People can save their money and
also
 do not worry about the quality of products. One of the advantages of ordering or eating
food
 at the restaurants is that people do not have to waste their time to cook it.
Furthermore
, people can just make a phone call and obtain their
food
 in half an hour.
Second advantage
Suggestion
The second advantage
 is that the diversity of
food
 is overweight in
restraunts
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restraints
. People can order a
food
 in all restaurants of the city which can have all the varieties of cuisine,
arabic
relating to or characteristic of Arabs
Arabic
,
american
of or relating to the United States of America or its people or language or culture
American
,
italian
of or pertaining to or characteristic of Italy or its people or culture or language
Italian
. People will not trouble themselves to cook something new and can obtain what they want with no bothering.
Finally
, it may be concluded that eating homemade
food
 can help people to avoid poisoning, but people will not have
such
 diversity of
food
 and will have to spend much time to cook it
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