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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie charts compare the proportion of
water
 consumption for various usages in six
regions
 of the world. Looking more closely at the trend of the charts, it can be clearly seen that, apart from
the
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North
America
 and Europe where
water
 is mostly used by industry,
agricutural
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agricultural
agriculture
 accounts
fir
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for
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 the majority of
water
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the water
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 used in all
regions
.
According to
 the charts,
agricuture
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agriculture
 is the main reason for
water
 consumption in all areas except North
America
 and Europe, ranging from 71% to almost 90%.
On the contrary
, about one-
third
 of
water
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 is used for
agricutural
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agricultural
purpose
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 in Europe and North
America
.
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 roughly half of
water
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the water
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 is
soncumed
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consumed
 by industry in the two
regions
,
whereas
 less than 13% of
water
 is used for the same purpose in
other
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 four areas.
In addition
, among the percentage of domestic use, the figure is highest in South
America
, accounting for approximately 19% of the total
water
 use. Meanwhile,
this
 usage represents the lowest proportion in the other
regions
, ranging from 7% to 15%. In
conslusion
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conclusion
,
argricuture
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agriculture
 makes up for the majority of
water
 usage
among
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 many
region
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regions
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, regions, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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