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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via internet and live with any face to face contact with others.is it a positive or negative development in your opinion. To what extent do you support this development.

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With the rise in modernization, a man has transformed his life tremendously. He has progressed from walking barefooted in the jungles to take
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first step
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the first step
 on the moon.
Nevertheless
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, there are some issues which
remains
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remain
irreuocable
incapable of being retracted or revoked
irrevocable
 and as complex as ever. For-instance, the given topic asserts that due to the
internet
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 facilities
such
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 as: shopping, doing online jobs and sharing our views with each others as well as survive without making direct contact with each other. Should all these facilities provided by
internet
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 indicate positive or negative changes in
this
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 present
scenerio
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
?Through
this
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 essay, I shall explore the dimensions of
this
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 topic with illustration and examples and shape up my opinion by the end. On one side, there is a group of people who reckon that
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internet
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the internet
 plays
highly crucial role
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a highly crucial role
 in
everyone
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everyone's
 life. There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of merits of utilizing
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internet
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the internet
. They strengthen their
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
 by claiming that in
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 modern era, massive number of people prefer to purchase
huge variety
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a huge variety
 of products related to the cosmetic as well as household goods, sunscreen lotions are the best epitome.
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, I have to say that,
internet
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 plays
fundamental role
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a fundamental role
 in our life and it seems that it is a positive change.
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,
internet
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 service is a best source of communication with our friends, relatives which were residing in foreign countries.
As a result
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, it
provide
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provides
 great assistance to hold strong relationships. Contrary to
this
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, there is an opposing group of people who reckon that advancement in
modern era
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the modern era
 in the field of
technology especially,
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technology, especially
technology especial,
 in
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internet
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the internet
 have some negative impact on the development of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
. They claim that
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internet
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the internet
 is just a wastage of
time
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. According to their prospective, they realize that most of the individuals communicate with their relatives for
longer period
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longer periods
a longer period
 because,
internet
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 service is cost-effective. They believe that '
Time
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 and tides waits for none.'
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,
such
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 people who spend
lot
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lots
 of
time
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 on
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internet
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the internet
 may
lost
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lose
 their precious
time
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. To crown it all, I have to say that
nevertheless
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, there is no single conclusion. Still, I make
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 ground that an effective clap
require
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requires
 both use of hands. "Every garden has weeds"
therefore
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,
nodoubt
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no doubt
,
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internet
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the internet
have
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has
 few drawbacks as some people spend much
time
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 on it as they required ultimately, leads to wastage of
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time but
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time, but
, it has voluminous merits as it
provide
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provides
 great assistance to make social bonding as well as purchasing
variety
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a variety
 of goods. At the end, I personally realize that using
internet
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 facilities leads to positive development in
this
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 contemporary era.
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