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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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All people are capable of doing great things, no matter how they look and what disabilities they have. Disability is prominent in our society and it is important that we live and work in communities, that provide necessary supports
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 them. People should learn to respect and reverence for every human mind. The problem isn’t the person’s disability, but society’s view of the person’s abilities. People with disabilities deserve the chance to build a life for themselves in their communities which they choose to live. We must treat disabled people respectfully considering them as able and capable as the normal people. We must not let them feel as if they are being pitied. All they need and require from us is emotional support and respect. Their struggles, challenges, obstacles are capable of handling.
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 people living with some type of disability may not have the opportunity to live life in the same way that we do. Disability simply requires a little creativity and resourcefulness and a lot of hard work and determination. Society has a tendency to view individuals with disabilities as incapable of making contributions to the world. Some of the greatest contributions that have been made
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 world have come from people living with various types of disabilities, proving that their creativity and
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 are invaluable. Disabled or not, all people are capable of doing great things with the life they have been given. We are all unique in our own way, and we all possess the potential to have a positive impact on the world.
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