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Some people think that using animal for experiment is cruel but other people think that it is necessary for the development of science.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is a famous saying"necessity is the mother of invention" and
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 invention in the every sector is flourishing by the heaps and bounds. Many inventions required animals to test the success of result,
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, few opine that it is hard to use them
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 experiments while others opine that it is a necessity in the growth of new inventions. The
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 and foremost reason is that the experiment should not be done on dogs
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mouse and any living animals. They too have families and
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However Sciene
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However, science
However science
 has provided many remedies for the serious disease through these experiments and increase the
life
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 span of human. The
life
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 of animals should not be sacrificed in order to achieve the desired result, reason being sometimes it leads to the death of the animal which is not worthy. To exemplify
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, it can state that, Many countries have rare species animal and if they will not protect them and use them for
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 purpose
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 it would be hard to save them for
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 gen. Another compelling argument in
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 is that these animals should not be not torched as every
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 is important. Science should find other ways to do the experiments so that the
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 of these animals can be saved.
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Moreover animlas
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Moreover, animals
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 are playing an important role in human
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 too. To recapitulate, after contemplating it can be stated that, it is not a wise idea to use animals for experiments. Science has made so much progress,
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they other ways should be searched to check the quality of experiments.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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