The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
units
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of electricity production by fuel source are different in both 1980 and 2000 production in
Australia
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and
France
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. The total manufacture in 1980
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100
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in
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and 90
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in
France
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.
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, the total manufacture in 2000
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170
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in
Australia
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and 180
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in
France
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.
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, there
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are
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10
units
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difference in both countries in 2 different years.
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, the pie chart
in
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1980 shows that coal
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more used in
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compared
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in
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France
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as well as
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Hydro Power.
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,
Australia
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doesn't practice Nuclear Power
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to
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. Even so,
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used more oil than
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as well as
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natural
gas
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.
Thus
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,
Australia
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is using more electricity by coal, natural
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and steam capacity,
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,
France
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is statistically balancing the use of fuel
source
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sources
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.
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, the pie chart in 2000 manufacture,
Australia
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step
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up from using coal, 1/8 of steam capacity and 2
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of natural
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and oil.
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,
France
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also
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step
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up in using nuclear capacity, 25
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in both coal and oil, and 2
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of natural
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and hydro energy.
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, the 2000 production shows that
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have
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never used nuclear energy since 1980. In conclusion,
France
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lessen
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the use of other fuel
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and increase their nuclear energy which
also
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helps
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the environment.
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,
Australia
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use more coal for electricity and 36
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of
hydro power
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hydropower
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