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In recent years, the small local shop has closed because customers travel to two large Shopping Centre for the mall to do their shopping in this a positive or negative development?

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development
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; we are living in the modern era, everybody wants to develop. Nowadays, the young generation wants to freedom to choose anything whatever is it,
for example
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:
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:
- shopping, grocery extra. That
time
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 dots our parent's purchase
clothes grocery
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clothes, grocery
 stationery from small shops.
Time
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 has changed, now, most of the people prefer to
shop
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 from
Mall
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the Mall
 or large complex centre.
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, some
time
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 to do shopping from
malls shows
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malls, shows
 a positive impact on the country's
development
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.
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, for the
time
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 being, everybody purchases every essential and nonessential thing from malls. It has meant small shopper thinks about their own
development
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 and converts their
shop
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 into a large
shop
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 or maybe the small shops will part of the mall ultimately, beneficial steps for developing to a developed country.
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,
Mall
Suggestion
the Mall
 is not only convenient for the
youngster but
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youngster, but
also
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 for any age group.
Mall
Suggestion
The mall
 provides lots of
facility
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facilities
 like
sitting lifting
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sitting, lifting
 and
many
Suggestion
much
 more, apart from
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, everything in one place, it means less
time
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 consuming as well as less travelling. If you feel hungry, you will eat a variety of food, those are available in the mall rather than the
market you
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market, you
 do not feel tired, sweetie properly, because, you are in the air condition area or ducting environment. That's why you enjoy your shopping as per your convenience. In confusion, every small shopkeeper enhances their thinking towards
development
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. Every country's government
make
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makes
 plans for
development
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, a small
shop
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 should take a part in
development
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 I know sometimes get a loan from the government is not a piece of cake
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 we should try at least once. Changes do not happen suddenly it occurs
slowly
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slowly, therefore
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 always try to take a small step towards
development
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.
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 but not least, every dark cloud has a silver lining.
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