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Wealthy nation should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disaster. Do you agree or disagree

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Natural calamities are unpredictable, and it has a huge impact to any
nation
 which has been affected.
This
 essay agrees that richer countries should always lend a helping hand to t
he poorer
Suggestion
the poorest
the poor
nation
 who has been the victim of a
ct
Suggestion
an act
acts
of god because of these two reasons, primarily it is their social responsibility,
secondly
 to maintain the global
economy
. It is not unknown to us that wealthier
nation
 is rich in resources and they have a good credibility in other people’s eyes. It is their communal duty to provide basic needs so that affected lessor
nation
 and come back to survival. We know that time always changes if the richer countries are supporting in these tough times and when there is a need for them
then
 poorer
nation
 can
also
 come forward and support them. Every
nation
 is depending on each other o
n
Suggestion
in
some other ways, and if poorer
nation
 has been the victim of unprecedented challenge
t
hen
conjunction used in comparatives
than
wealthier
nation
 should brace themselves and take the ownership of maintaining the global
economy
. If they don’t do, the they might
also
 fall on the pothole as rich
nation
 multinational company invest in p
oorer
Suggestion
poorer nations
a poorer nation
nation
 because of cheap l
abor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
and if their
economy
 is directly proportional with the wellbeing poorer
nation
. I strongly opine that to live a steady life for both the type of
nation
 it is very necessary that r
ich
Suggestion
a rich economy nation
rich economy nations
the rich economy nation
economy
nation
 always help the one with low
economy
 at the time of crisis which happen during any natural disaster.
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