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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided two maps demonstrate the information regarding the
island
Use synonyms
, before the construction and after the change of
few
Correct article usage
a few
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 tourist spots. At the first
glance
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,glance
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 it is clearly seen that, during
year
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the year
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 2015,
at
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on
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 the north side of the
island
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 there
were
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was
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
tree
Change to a plural noun
trees
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, which are now converted into
parking
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the parking
a parking
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area
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areas
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.During the past years,
in
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on
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east
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the east
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 coastline of the
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island
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,island
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 few rides and parks were made for play
purpose
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purposes
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 and these rides
are still remain
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are still remaining
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same
Correct article usage
the same
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 as they were in the past.
Apart from
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this
Linking Words
, in
middle
Correct article usage
the middle
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 of the
beach
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,beach
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 a new hotel is introduced. Moving
further
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, big statues are
also
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 built-up for the tourists,
beside
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besides
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 the hotel.
Moreover
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, four swimming pools, which were in the corner of the parking area and remain stable, but
at
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on
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 the left side of these swimming pools there was a garden
also
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.But, in the present time, the garden
is vanished
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vanishes
vanished
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 into a laughing club with lots of seating
section
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sections
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.
Overall
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, in the past era, the
island
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 did not have many facilities but after the
construction
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,construction
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 lots of new things had added for the tourists.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • before and after
  • transformation
  • infrastructure
  • natural features
  • network of cottages
  • footpaths
  • recreational areas
  • pristine environment
  • organized lodging facilities
  • strategically positioned
  • delineated pathways
  • untouched nature
  • accessibility
  • isolated island experience
  • enhanced transportation options
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