Some parents are worried about the increasing level of violence on TV, video games and other types of entertainment for children’s leisure. How does this affect children? How do you think the problem can be tackled?

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It is considered by some parents that watching violent acts on television,

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games, or other sources of entertainment whilst their free time is worrying. It has an everlasting

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on a child’s mind, depending upon their ages, as younger children get scared while older ones think that it is normal to be violent. Depending upon the ages of the children, it can have detrimental effects on them.

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, the younger children, are in the learning stages of their lives and take everything seriously, sometimes watching

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on the television, which is depicted through movies and

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games leaves a bad

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on their mind.

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, a young child watching a superhero movie always gets fascinated with the hero’s character and wants to imitate it, but has a bad

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about the villain,

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an image is created in his mind and is scared of it, and

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can

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leave an

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on them.

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, older children think that it is ok to be violent sometimes. One of the best ways to tackle the problems of

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is through parental guidance. Strict parental guidance is required while watching a movie or

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games.

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, the parents have to get involved in their child’s activities, even when they are watching any source of entertainment,

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can be done by going through the content

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and know about the ongoing program of TV in which their child is interested in.

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, explaining the scenarios ant context that why the act was shown in the particular part of the movie so that the children don’t get scared or take it casually that it is ok to be violent. In conclusion, parental guidance and strict rules are very important to protect children from ongoing

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which is depicted by television shows, internet, or

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games.

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