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Nowadays, technology has enable workers to work from home. Some people say it benefits only workers, not employers. Do you agree/disagree?

#technology #workers #work #home #people #employers
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At the present
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, thanks to technological advances, employees are able to
work
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 from home. There are thoughts that remote working does good to only workers, not managers. While there is some truth in the fact that employers enjoy certain benefits, I still support that the advantages of employees are more significant. In
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 essay, I will
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 discuss the role of distance working
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on
 improving
productivity
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productivity, then
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 elaborate on the way it helps
staff
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 manage schedules flexibly. On the one hand, online working helps managers who need
assistance enhance
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assistance to enhance
 productivity. In fact, remote working is the easy way to instantly connect
team-mates
a fellow member of a team
teammates
teammates'
teammate's
.
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, saving offline meetings and reporting progress
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 give more
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 to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 more tasks. In the past, managers wasted
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 gathering
staff
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 to meet in physical interaction that led to more and more backlogs were prolonged to solve. But now, that problem is treated by working through the Internet which permits smooth meetings to take place.
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, Huyndai, whose boss allows his
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 to
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 from home, experienced a greatly increasing income by 30% in 2016.
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, for employees, benefits of remote working are more significant when it lets them manage schedules flexibly. Cutting down on commuting
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, blue-collar workers are not under strict
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 supervision and have the ability to
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liberately
freely in a nonliteral manner
liberally
. At that
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, workers
feel
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felt
 at ease and motivated to meet the deadline.
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, after the Covid-19 pandemic, more than 20% of businesses move to online working form. Because their
staff
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 want to
work
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 at their disposal. In conclusion, while working from home contributes to enhance productivity, I totally believe that distance working is more advantageous to workers when it helps them
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in
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with
 flexible schedules. I suggest businesses should try to update hi-tech gadgets and facilitate their workers able to telecommuting.
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