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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with ? What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys ?

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Parenting would be one of the significant and challenging phenomenon in
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 millennium.Few parents have a tendency to buy a lot of toys for their children to pamper them.
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playing is vital for the growth of children’s health and brain development.In
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both the parents are working and especially people prefer to live as nuclear family
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they will be bringing more entertainment stuffs for their kids, which will help them to pass the
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 accelerate immune system while they play with the toys rather sedentary
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, many toys are available in the market which help kids to be creative and informative.
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many anecdotes and longitudinal studies have depicted that babies could learn the various colours through toys while they play.
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there are detrimental effects on children who is depended only on toys while they play.Primarily
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 the pupil will be affected by playing with toys more often
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accustoms consume the majority of their
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 children lose the focus on their studies.Another downside would be parents quality
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 with children would be limited if they encourage their children to play with toys a lot of
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if parent’s are not giving sufficient attention to their children's toys would be hazardous to babies and toddlers. In conclusion
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, if guardians have the inclination to buy more stuff to their kids, it has had many demerits and Merits.
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 Parents should pamper the children not just giving a lot of gifts rather they should give much attention to the
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 they spend with their babies and
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 their selection of toys intact would be beneficial for the children.
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