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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in country's police and military forces, such as army, while others think that women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In our modern society, the role of women gradually becomes more salient. The opinion has been divided on whether they should get as equal as men in great jobs
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 While there are some valid arguments that they should not still appropriate for these
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 I think that women need to be given rights as men
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 some reason why women should not engage in these onerous jobs nowadays. They partly are not as
couragous
possessing or displaying courage; able to face and deal with danger or fear without flinching
courageous
 as men to face the pressure from the public when there are crisis. That could result in the stress which possibly make them resign,
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, a vast amount of burdens would fall on their bosses and the authorities, who are in
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 to fill the gap left. The women are usually considered as a less ambitious one than
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 men colleagues, which could make them inferior to be a leader for the development of the countries or their firms Despite the preceding arguments, I am of the opinion that women should get more opportunities to get more responsibility in various kinds of jobs
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 They are creative and determined enough to implement the important projects. At the same time, they are even more patient and tactful than the men colleagues to address the negative situations
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so that, the work could be done efficiently. A case in
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policers
a plan of action adopted by an individual or social group
policies
 could be more ingratiating to ask the criminal for more clues without too much time.
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, in the modern era, women increasingly replace their traditional role in the house to make more profound impacts on society.
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, we should sympathetic with them and give them support to for their career promotion. With the aforementioned discussion, despite some ideas that are against the role of women, they still deserve to take on the duty in many jobs
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