the pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the main reasons why
agricultural
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the agricultural
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continent becomes less productive. The
causes
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are over-grazing, deforestation, over-cultivation, and other
causes
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of worldwide land degradation.
In addition
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, the table illustrates how these
causes
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, affected three
regions
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of the world during the 1990s. The
regions
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are North
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Oceania
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.
Firstly
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, the pie chart shows that 35% of over-grazing is one of the main reasons for ground degradation. In
Oceania
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, a large group of islands in the South Pacific including Australia and New Zealand, used 11.3% of over-grazing, 5.5% in
Europe
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, and 1.5% in North
America
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.
Hence
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,
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has the highest percentage among
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the other main reasons
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land deterioration.
Secondly
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, 30% of deforestation, which makes it the
second
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highest percentage
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to over-grazing. In
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,
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the agricultural
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continent becomes less productive by 1.7% of deforestation, 9.8% in
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, and 0.2% in North
America
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.
Thus
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, these
regions
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are easily affected by natural disasters
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as
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floods
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, etc.
Thirdly
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, 28% of over-cultivation worldwide is the cause of land degradation. In
Oceania
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, they don't support
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procedure, meanwhile, 7.7% in
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, and 3.3% in North
America
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. In conclusion, 7% of other
causes
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are affected worldwide.
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, the most affected
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regions
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region
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is
Europe
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with 23% of the total field degraded,
second
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is
Oceania
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with 13%, and
lastly
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is North
America
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with 5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words causes, regions, america, europe, oceania with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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