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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002
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The chart below illustrates how many minutes of phone calls occurred in the UK in three categories between 1995
aand
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and
 2002.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
while
local-fixed
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the local-fixed
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line
category
 had the most
number
 of minutes,
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the mobiles
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mobiles
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category
 witnessed the lowest of that.
Further
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of national and international-fixed
line
 and mobiles
category
 registered an increase from 1995 to 2002. At a glance,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
phone
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a phone
the phone
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call
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calls
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 in
local-fixed
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the local-fixed
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category
 was more than the other categories -national and international-fixed
line
 and mobiles- during the period from 1995 to 2002.
In addition
, At the beginning of local fixed
line
number
 was seen at above 70
billions
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billion
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 in 1995.
Whereas
 the local fixed
line
 rose slightly by 1999, which accounted for 90
billion
, it decreased
at
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 about 70
billion
 from 1999 to 2000.
On the other hand
,
number
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a number
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 of
national
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the national
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 and international fixed
line
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lines
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 saw a slight rise, which stood at
from
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approximately 40 to 60
billions
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billion
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.
Moreover
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of mobiles started at just under 10
billion
 and
then
 it
exprience
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experience
experienced
a
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apply
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considerable growth, reaching
at
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under 50
billion
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, category, number, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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