The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
cycle is explaining the life cycle of salmon
fish
. It is clear that
salmon
needs to go through from
three Change preposition
apply
steps
. In each stage their size
and shape changes
Fix the agreement mistake
change
Change preposition
from then
then
previous Correct your spelling
the
steps
. In first
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the first
step
, salmon
lay their eggs around the small stones under reeds for approximately six months upper the river
with slow movement
. The size
of small
Correct article usage
a small
selmon
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salmon
Selmon
approximately
3 to 4 Add a missing verb
is approximately
centimetres
In second
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the second
step
, selmon
Correct your spelling
salmon
Selmon
fish
move
from upper
Correct article usage
the upper
river
to lower
Correct article usage
the lower
river
. Their movement
becomes faster in lower rivers. They stay their approximately 4 years
. The size
of selmons
in Correct your spelling
sermons
salmon
salmons
second
Correct article usage
the second
step
almost
12 to 15 Add a missing verb
is almost
centimetres
.In third
stride, Change the article
the third
Correct article usage
the selmon
selmon
Correct your spelling
salmon
Selmon
move
from lower
Correct article usage
the lower
river
to open
Correct article usage
the open
sea
. The size
of selmons
becomes 70 to 76 Correct your spelling
sermons
salmon
salmons
centimetres
, these salmon
called
Add a missing verb
are called
adult
salmon
. The duration of adult
salmon
in open
Add an article
the open
sea
almost
5 Add a missing verb
is almost
years
. So, selmon
changes their Change the capitalization
Selmon
size
in three steps
Fry, Smolt and adult
fish
.
In second
Change the article
the second
step
, selmon
Correct your spelling
salmon
Selmon
fish
move
from upper
Correct article usage
the upper
river
to lower
Correct article usage
the lower
river
. Their movement
becomes faster in lower rivers. They stay their approximately 4 years
. The size
of selmons
in Correct your spelling
sermons
salmon
salmons
second
Change the article
the second
step
almost
12 to 15 Add a missing verb
is almost
centimetres
third
stride, Correct article usage
the selmon
selmon
Correct your spelling
salmon
Selmon
move
from lower
Correct article usage
the lower
river
to open
Correct article usage
the open
sea
. The size
of selmons
becomes 70 to 76 Correct your spelling
sermons
salmon
salmons
centimetres
, these salmon
called
Add a missing verb
are called
adult
salmon
. The duration of adult
salmon
in open
Add an article
the open
sea
almost
5 Add a missing verb
is almost
years
. So, selmon
changes their Change the capitalization
Selmon
size
in three steps
Fry, Smolt and adult
fish
.In second
Change the article
the second
step
, selmon
Correct your spelling
salmon
Selmon
fish
move
from upper
Correct article usage
the upper
river
to lower
Correct article usage
the lower
river
. Their movement
becomes faster in lower rivers. They stay their approximately 4 years
. The size
of selmons
in Correct your spelling
sermons
salmon
salmons
second
Correct article usage
the second
step
almost
12 to 15 Add a missing verb
is almost
centimetres
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish, steps, size, step, river, movement, selmon, centimetres, second, move, years, selmons, sea, adult with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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