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The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 cycle is explaining the life cycle of
salmon
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fish
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.
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salmon
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 needs to go through
from
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apply
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three
steps
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. In each stage their
size
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 and shape
changes
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change
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then
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the
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 previous
steps
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. In
first
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the first
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step
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,
salmon
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 lay their eggs around the small stones under reeds for approximately six months upper the
river
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 with slow
movement
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. The
size
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 of
small
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a small
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selmon
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salmon
Selmon
approximately
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is approximately
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 3 to 4
centimetres
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second
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the second
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step
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,
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selmon
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salmon
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fish
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move
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 from
upper
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the upper
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river
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 to
lower
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the lower
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river
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. Their
movement
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 becomes faster in lower rivers. They stay their approximately 4
years
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. The
size
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 of
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selmons
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sermons
salmon
salmons
 in
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second
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the second
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step
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almost
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is almost
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 12 to 15
centimetres
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.In
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third
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the third
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 stride,
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the selmon
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selmon
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salmon
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move
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 from
lower
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the lower
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river
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 to
open
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the open
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sea
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. The
size
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 of
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selmons
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sermons
salmon
salmons
 becomes 70 to 76
centimetres
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, these
salmon
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called
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are called
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adult
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salmon
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. The duration of
adult
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salmon
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 in
open
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the open
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sea
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almost
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is almost
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 5
years
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. So,
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selmon
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 changes their
size
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 in three
steps
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 Fry, Smolt and
adult
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fish
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. In
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second
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the second
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step
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,
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selmon
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salmon
Selmon
fish
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move
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 from
upper
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the upper
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river
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 to
lower
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the lower
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river
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. Their
movement
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 becomes faster in lower rivers. They stay their approximately 4
years
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. The
size
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 of
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selmons
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sermons
salmon
salmons
 in
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second
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the second
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step
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almost
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is almost
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 12 to 15
centimetres
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third
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 stride,
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the selmon
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selmon
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salmon
Selmon
move
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 from
lower
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the lower
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river
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 to
open
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the open
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sea
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. The
size
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 of
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selmons
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sermons
salmon
salmons
 becomes 70 to 76
centimetres
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, these
salmon
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called
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are called
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adult
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salmon
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. The duration of
adult
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salmon
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 in
open
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the open
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sea
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almost
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is almost
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 5
years
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. So,
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selmon
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Selmon
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 changes their
size
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 in three
steps
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 Fry, Smolt and
adult
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fish
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.In
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second
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the second
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step
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,
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selmon
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salmon
Selmon
fish
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move
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 from
upper
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the upper
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river
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 to
lower
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the lower
show examples
river
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. Their
movement
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 becomes faster in lower rivers. They stay their approximately 4
years
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. The
size
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 of
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selmons
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sermons
salmon
salmons
 in
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second
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the second
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step
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almost
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is almost
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 12 to 15
centimetres
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, third".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish, steps, size, step, river, movement, selmon, centimetres, second, move, years, selmons, sea, adult with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 5 times.
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