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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is believed in certain
companies
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 that
employees
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 should care more about how they dress to work,
while
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 other
companies
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 appreciate the
quality
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 of work an employee has to offer. In my opinion, our
appearances
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 matter depending on the job acquired,
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, is more important that a
company
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 focuses
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 delivering great services.
Appearances
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 are usually considered in jobs that require
employees
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 to interact constantly with clients,
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, marketing, human resources or trade. The reason
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 is important is because outfits work as an expression of personality, and allow
employees
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 to have a sense of empowerment. Some
employees
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 believe that wearing a suit is like
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armor
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 that makes them invincible.
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, looking presentable gives clients the illusion that an employee is organized and responsible.
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, a good
quality
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 service helps a
company
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 grow. When
appearances
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 are not taken into consideration, customers see an employee as a human being, not as a service.
This
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 creates a sense of comfort, which helps
companies
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 develop better and stronger relationships with
its
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 clients.
Therefore
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, customers are more willing to remain loyal to one
company
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. From my experience, I believe both are important. When I am dressed appropriately
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 an occasion,
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 a meeting, I have noticed that my colleagues tend to focus more on what I am trying to communicate.
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 means that people might be taken more seriously depending on what they are wearing.
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,
quality
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 should always be of significant importance, because
at the end
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 of the
day
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 a
company
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 is selling a product or service, not a style. In conclusion,
companies
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 should strive for a balance between
appearances
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 and
quality
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, but the latter should be emphasized more for the future development of a
company
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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